In the modern era, the Internet is regarded as a key factor contributing to the development of society. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the utilization of this powerful tool and the ramifications of its widespread exploitation in various fields. Many people adhere to the view that the knowledge obtained through the Internet is not necessarily good and may violate people’s privacy in some cases, while the Internet proponents believe that the information will help us to overcome our problems. I strongly support the idea that Information is valuable. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, I think the Internet forces people, especially politicians, to observe their behavior. When somebody knows that he is under surveillance and others may be aware of his actions, he will try not to commit any mistakes. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About 6 years ago, some of the corrupt individuals in our government smuggled some illegal commodities into the country and sold them with high prices. However the television and newspapers were under the influence of these criminals, their names were published in our online social media like facebook. As a result, people began to ask our courts to sentence them for their crimes. After a while, they became arrested and now they are in jail. I believe if it wasn’t for the Internet, these people would have continued their villainy and also it stopped others from joining them.
Secondly, it can resolve some of our difficulties in life. When we don’t know the answer to a problem, the first thing that comes into our minds is looking for it on the Internet. In fact, this approach has become so common that the verb “google” is added to the dictionary, and illustrates the integration of our lives with the virtual world. For example, 2 years ago, I was driving from my hometown in the east to Yazd in the middle section of Iran. It was hot summer noon and the road was virtually empty. Suddenly, I found out that I had a flat tire and didn’t know how to fix it. I googled my situation and watched a tutorial about changing the tire. After an hour, I was driving on the road again with a giant smile on my face showing my satisfaction about what had happened.
In conclusion, I think the pervasive use of the Internet is a good phenomenon. I believe this way because it stops the corruption in the society, and also provides accessible information for us to overcome some of our hardships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ing example of this. About 6 years ago, some of the corrupt individuals in our government s...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...country and sold them with high prices. However the television and newspapers were unde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84545454545 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86572795188 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559090909091 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7080341401 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6956521739 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19330908661 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480973261267 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440090505364 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124490989489 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514825561406 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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