Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
As a coin has two sides, its hard to deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of giving money to beggars. If i were forced to choose, i would definitely say that giving money to beggars is wrong. There are a few reasons why I am of this opinion. I will discuss these reasons in subsequent parapraphs.
To begin with, our country has countless beggars on the streets that needs to be taken in serious consideration by our goverment. Giving money to beggars makes them get used to it and be out on the streets everyday instead of working to get a job and earn their stipend in order to help themselves and their kin. My own experience is a compelleing example of this. Right outside of my college back in the day had several beggars follow me and my peers all the way to our vechicles to get money, they would get money easily from me and the peers. Consequently, they made begging their daily rountine and would beg everyday outside of the college. Had the goverment done something to help these beggars to get them job they wont be out on the streets begging.
Secondly, more than adult beggars , children begging on streets are more vunerable to street crimes. Street crimes in our country is on the rise, giving money to children would put them is risk and would make them stay out in the streets everyday. For instance, I have seen plenty of young children beg on the streets out of colleges, malls, shops. Because of them begging on the streets they come across wrong people that would assault them and put them in a bad state mentally. Young children should be made to go to schools at this age instead of begging on the streets to help their families.
In the light on the above mentioned reason, I have a firm belive that money should not be given to beggars on the streets, Instead, should be encourged to work for money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47774480712 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37562911015 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492581602374 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8700302789 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3125 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182285590893 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636298817033 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460491843249 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122607639183 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143827755549 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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