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Children should be required to follow strict rules set by the parents

Children are an epitome of clay, they mold as you treat them. If I were forced to choose, I would disagree with the statement that children must follow stringent rules set by their parents. It is my firm believe that children should be allowed to discover themselves and learn on their own. I feel this way because of some reasons that I will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, children that grow up in stern households, grow up to be less confident and struggle with communicating outside of their homes. For instance, at school or college. Children should be allowed to do things on their own, that way they learn and discover new things and techniques and grow up to be confident in themselves and assertive in whatever life brings them. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I grew up in a household where my parents sternly dictated most of things that I feel shattered my self-confidence. As I grew up and pursued higher education, i always had trouble communicating with peers and lecturers. On top of that, I avoided communication and stayed on my own. As a result, I was left behind in projects because I would not take help and talk to anyone.
Secondly, parents that raise children under rules tend to be rebellious especially teenagers, they tend to hide their feelings and do what their peers do to fit in. In result, they can go in a wrong direction, if parents are lenient and allow children to be on themselves they would consider things cautiously and even share with parents to get better advice. For instance, I had a friend in school those parents were very strict on where she went and who she went out with. As a result, she became frustrated and started skipping school to go out with friends. Had her parents not set rules she would not have went against what her parents advised her.
In conclusion, although it is important for parents to keep an eye on young children it is also pivotal for growing kids to be set free to grow and discover. In the light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that children should not be required to follow strict rules.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 488, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the things') or simply say ''most things''.
Suggestion: most of the things; most things
...ehold where my parents sternly dictated most of things that I feel shattered my self-confidenc...
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Line 3, column 611, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
...arents not set rules she would not have went against what her parents advised her. ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63925729443 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66771509713 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490716180371 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4455532333 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0526315789 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358946322291 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944495488244 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100470739511 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239490721907 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100308776299 0.0645574589148 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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