Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, increasing communciation access like television channel, newspaper and online content ensure the wide spread of the information in less time. Personally, though media plays crucial role in information exchange, I believe that its violent content about any criminal issue should be curtailed as it create similar instances in the future and negatively affect children's pshycology.
First of all, scrutinizing criminal act in the social page can be terrible idea as it instruct other to commit crime again. In fact, criminal use the same protocol as described by the media and might execute it to harm innocent people. For instance, few days ago, I had read the news about the acid attack in the india. The victim was a girl who refused to accept the proposal of the young men of 24 years old. When he was asked why he did so, he replied that he felt humilated and wanted to condescend women by spoiling her looks. However, the case was not first in the india; many times same case was happened earlier and the reasons for the crime was the same. This incidnet only represent how can media news can be misused to inflict criminal act infinetly in the society.
Lastly, showing crime imitation in the televisioin might ruin pshyscology of the children. As the open reach of the media and television, children can be terrified by viewing the violent content in the television. Sometimes, children are unable to handle the act, they might be frightened and be sick. Many television show free show the activities like beheading, countless shot on the person and massive flowing of the blood which can harsh effect in the children's mind.
In conclusion. it strongly believe that showing crime is not the appropriate this is because it not only pursuade criminal but also unnerve the children which can be detrimental to the children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, look, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96129032258 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64564118385 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1805743042 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946511743016 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313853912771 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0263115850497 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617204983755 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153185803538 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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