Some people think with the development of technology and Internet libraries will disappear while others think libraries are always necessary Which idea do you agree with and please give specific details to support your opinion

Nowadays, with advancements of technology, most of the paper stuffs like as books and novels are disappeared, and people read the iBook's in their cellphones. In my opinion, it has some advantages and disadvantages, so now I want to discuss about them.

First, in an era of progress, people don’t have time to waste on, and the time is valuable, so they are working hard to make comfortable life for themselves. For example, I lived in Australia for 13 years and since I emigrate to this country I was young, and I used to know about news by reading the newspaper but I study nursing on Latrobe university and after I graduated I found a great job in Bondi life-guard in Sydney as a paramedical nurse, so I didn’t have any time to read the newspaper and I have to instead of that to social medias like as Instagram application. And it’s really better than the papers reading.

Second, in the past, because of using lots of paper stuffs, they must cut down lots of trees, and destroyed an animal’s life, and because of that, many popular of animals got decrease to 10 or 20 number in all the world. For example, in Amazon forest after cutting trees, because of that weather always been rainy, make the overflow like as huge flooded, and it was like the human killed that animals one by one. In 2013, my thesis was about, nearly 100 species of birds, in the Amazon basin, are at the highest recorded risk of extinction, according to a recent report by the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN), which noted in its 2012 IUCN Red List of Threatened Species that the extent and pattern of deforestation across the Amazon was the primary reason behind the unfortunate development. Included in the list are already critically endangered species like the Rio Branco Ant bird and, according to conservationists, even a moderate rate of deforestation could affect the Rio Ant bird, which has potentially longer life spans. "Over one million Long-tailed Ducks have disappeared from the Baltic Sea over the last 20 years, resulting in the species being up listed to Vulnerable. The reasons for this decline are still not clear, but the outlook for another sea duck, Velvet Scoter is even worse, as the species is now listed as Endangered," the report stated. Another critically endangered Amazonian bird at greater risk of extinction from deforestation is the Hoary-throat-ed Spine tail (kollari), which could face the loss of about 80 percent of its habitat in about a decade, just like Africa's White-backed and Rappel’s Vultures, whose numbers are declining because of habitat loss.

Third, on the other hand, old people, like as my grandparents, it’s hard for them to learn new things such as internet, therefore, they used to know about news on the television or reading the newspapers. I remember, my grand papa always told me, why newspaper stations get closed, so where should I go and discuss about title of each paper of newspaper with chief editor??? And I always laughed on him very loudly. In my thinking, his ideas are traditional, also my son couldn’t understand him anymore, because since he was 5 year old he had mini IPod, but in my view, the government shouldn’t have closed the newspaper houses it’s an old fashion in each country.

In conclusion, every working to protecting animals is really important, and these doing has more benefit for people too. So I agree to will disappear the paper stuffs and libraries and just have some of them, that turns into a museum. I hope the examples I’ve given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
... the species is now listed as Endangered,' the report stated. Another critically ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, still, therefore, third, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3032.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 614.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93811074919 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90695032913 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 332.0 212.727598566 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 950.4 618.680645161 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.955413527 48.9658058833 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 159.578947368 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3157894737 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0794741355268 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310275563629 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364073395285 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622595693491 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474666492143 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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