Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, computer technology is an integral advancement in contemporary life which we cannot imagine this convenient life without computers. While some countries may have problems to meet their citizens’ essential needs, the rest of the world, I believe should spend more budget to develop the computer technologies. I feel this way for a few reasons, which I aptly substantiate in what follows.
First, computer technology brings a unique opportunity to human by dividing resources equally between people. Thanks to the computer and the Internet advancement, folks have wonderful access to much data and information which before the computer era have been in access for only a few people. If we accept that data is the most important element which affect human’s life, we should support this idea that government must spend more money to improve people access and usage of the computer and the Internet. As an example, nowadays many students from all cross of the world can learn from the remote classes provided by the high rank universities such as Ivy league Universities.For example, my nephew has used some of these courses through the Coursera’s website, which offers people to use academic lectures which prepared by those colleges’ professor for free. If students wanted to get this courses’ credentials, should pay a small fee. It is an astounding chance for many students in many countries.
Second, computer technology introduces many job opportunities in developing countries, and this is changing millions of peoples’ life. Computer and the Internet technology disappeared distances between countries in various aspects. Many of developing countries were so poor before invention of computer, but now they progress sharply. India, as an emerging power in the world, is a powerful country related to its development in the computer technology. Many of the computer experts are Indian people who they produce many jobs and wealth for their people. I read an article that computer technology and next generation inventions such as smart phone and smart gadgets are in the main stram of improvement of underdevelopment and developing countries.
In conclusion, considering all aforementioned details, I strongly believe that computer technology besides the Internet has brought an equality in the new world with increasing people’s access to data and information and producing more job opportunities in developing countries. I think that government inevitably will fund more on the computer technology in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46700507614 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05598512216 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548223350254 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.8758492231 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.705882353 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261305451611 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845825947483 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559217173668 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165061375396 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284785305482 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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