Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In the modern era, no doubt that there is always a need of technology but government should first fulfil the basic needs than on other things for development of country. It is important that money should be spend on things like electricity, water and homes. In my view , though both things are necessary but basic needs must be prioritize. In the following essay I intend to put forth my points and reasons of support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, the prosperous country is one in which their locals do not suffer from the essential needs. Every one can live without the technology but not without education. For example, In my country we have modern technology ad a vast variety of computers but we suffer from the lack of education because there are only two government school in my area and it is definetely less for whole society children. In addition, when I visited Pakistan I realized they have technology but do not know how to use it. They just use computer to play and watch movies although you can do online work, studies and numerous things. Therefore, this example elucidates that if they have basic school to learn then it is better to have modern technology.
Second, government should spend money on hospitals for health care of people after that the remaining money should be spend on buying modern technological products. It is significant to take care about the health of its people. For instance, few months back my cousin died from cancer, as they do not have proper setup of taking care of cancer patient even though she was a pilot and we lost such a amazing person because government did not spend on basic needs of its people or country. Thus, this example illustrates that health of person is more important than buying a modern stuff.
To wrap up, some people may disagree but I believe that the major part of money must be utilize on the primary things because if you life healthy you can learn technology with time otherwise it is useless.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, no doubt, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70285714286 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49100947512 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531428571429 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7058481532 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.733333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324321888487 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099193191928 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083732806759 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189388548628 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388529149413 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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