Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Since the beginning of civilization humanity has been thinking about rational way of spending money on particular needs. An opinion exists, that governments ought to invest on technology modernization, while others claim that cash must be dedicated to basic requirements. I personally believe that that humans should increase amount of money, in order to develop computer innovations due to the reasons marked hereinafter.
First of all, technologies are the main factor of progressing and modern civilization, therefore they improve people’s life habitats. Innovations can be used in various spheres, such as medicine, where new equipment allows doctors to fight with different diseases, that is why humans will live longer. Furthermore, computers are extremely crucial for airports, where dispatchers analyze planes departure and prevent them from catastrophes. For example, according to the ‘Aeroflot’ company reviews, computer technologies saved more than 500 million people from crushing, thus aircraft became the safest transport. In other words, innovations help mankind to be healthier and live in a safe environment
However, some people do not agree with this opinion and consider that humanity should not spend money on technology, when fundamental needs are not completed. They contend that innovations are distracting factors which created to forget about real humans’ problems. I cannot agree with that point of view, as I am convinced, that problem of basic needs can be solved by computer technologies. For example, in Russia special programmed drons were used to pollinate flowers, therefore they increase harvest and eliminate food shortage in the country. Hence, mankind should use and develop technologies to overcome difficulties with main needs.
In conclusion I would like to say that progress in sphere of innovations is a key to successful and happy life. Although some individuals argues that computer technologies only tend to forget about drawback, I cause doubt that opinion as innovations create safe and healthy life and solve particular problems with fundamental needs
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since the beginning of civilization humanity ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rticular problems with fundamental needs
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68769716088 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02602760026 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624605678233 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4635935712 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.785714286 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32858850008 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979670734754 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773946520973 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184593504332 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891629813197 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 10.9000537634 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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