Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, think that life of elderly in the modern world is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Getting old is an eternal topic among human beings, especially in such a modern world now. Some people think it seems terrible to be an old man or woman, while others believe that old people can live a better life in modern society, compared with the past. I agree with the latter one.
For those who think there is no good for growing older, they may have the following reasons. First, older people are less popular than younger people in the job market. They may not be energetic enough due to the old body, and they may even become easier to forget things as being older. This means it is more difficult for them to make money for a high-quality life. Second, their action ability is drained so that they are not able to join plenty of activities, such as hiking and bungee jumping, or even just a long-distance trip. The life of elderly may be less colorful as the result of this factor.
Nevertheless, as life conditions getting better and better, especially for the old people, the average life span has been increased a lot over the past decades. Most previous deadly diseases are easily to be cured now, and the elders are no longer need to worry too much about their health as before. Not only they have the chance to live a healthy life, but also it is possible for them to live a colorful life. New technologies enable them to do numerous enjoying things, which are unimaginable before. They can see beautiful sceneries at home through the Internet. They can have delicious food at home transmitted by modern vehicles. They can even chat with a robot at home when they feel alone due to the artificial intelligence.
In conclusion, although it may cause some problems when people getting older, with the advanced technology and care from the society, the life of the elderly will become better and better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...at home transmitted by modern vehicles. They can even chat with a robot at home when...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67080745342 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40906528353 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7616715486 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4705882353 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21830173996 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656236266533 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728934547069 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152240620073 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811110910968 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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