Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?
It goes without saying that a great number of families with more than one child, rely on their first child more than the others and give them more responsibilities. The age difference between the siblings causes the parents to get help from the oldest one in taking care of youngers. Some people are inclined toward the attitude that it is unfair to put such responsibilities on older children, while others hold exactly the opposite perspective. From my vantage point, making the elders take care of the younger one is beneficial for both the parents and the children. In the following essay, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
First, taking care of younger siblings is a very good practice for older ones to become more responsible and social in their ensuing lives. By taking responsibilities as young as a child, children are provided by more experiences. These experiences can be beneficial even when they grow old and become parents themselves. Consequently, it is beneficial for not only one generation but also all the upcoming generations too. For instance, my mother is the first children in her family. When she was eight years old, my uncle was born. She had to take care of her little brother and even feed him or make him sleep whenever needed. Although she married at a young age and become a mother a little while after, all the experiences, which she gained through taking care of her sibling, helped her to become a wonderful mother who raised her children without any difficulties.
Second, when older children take care of the younger children, this may increase the intimacy between the siblings and lead to a warmer family. This will help the whole family to live in peace since children fight with each other less often. Besides, as children grow older this intimacy will be maintained and they would not be alone in the unfavorable world alone without support. An example drives this notion home. In the case of my mother’s family, the children really love each other and will do everything for each other. Among them, my mother as the first child is the most beloved member of the family and she is the biggest supporter of her brothers and sisters. When they face a problem, my mother is the first one from whom they get help.
To wrap it up, I firmly believe that giving older children the responsibility of taking care of younger ones is an effective solution to have a happy family. Not only do the children become more responsible, but also the family will experience more intimate relationships. I myself as the first child of the family gained a lot of experiences and become more responsible. Furthermore, my sister and I are really close and have a very pleasant relationship.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83974358974 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73403677414 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6978061679 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.375 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248606775779 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744115752421 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652873527139 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161714962072 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051588835754 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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