Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?
Without any shadow of doubt, nowadays training and upbringing children play a key role in all societies. No one can deny the effects of having well-trained children in our daily lives. Some parents may hold the view that they, themselves, should directly outlook their children’s training. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that their sibling can do this responsibility much better than they do. As far as I am concerned, in order for children to develop in a decent direction, their siblings could take the responsibility even better than their parents for a number of reasons, two of which are elaborate upon hereunder.
The first and probably the most important reason to be mentioned is that if their parents allow their older child to take care of the newborns, the child not only can do this job properly, but will also learn how to be responsible in his or her life additionally. To shed light on this matter, I would like to mention a personal example. When I was eleven years old, my sister born. I was extremely passionate about upbringing her and my parents were also keen to allow me to do so. It was really tough, but during this process, I learned to be self-independence in my life. Indeed, it paved the way for me to tolerate living in the dormitory while I was far from my city.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that nowadays, earning money becomes a difficult challenge. Both men and women have to work many hours to afford the expenses of life. So it becomes a blessing in disguise when the older child takes care of the youngest one in order to help their parents. Also, it has become a norm among families to do this. In fact, there is no need for parents to hire a nurse anymore. Based on a recently revealed research by an authentic institute in my country, In the field of economy, families could also save up to 1000 dollars each month and this could raise their monetary power to expense it for children subsequently.
To make a long story short, one can easily conclude that parents should allow their oldest child to take care of the youngest because there are plenty of benefits for both parents and the child which two of them mentioned above.
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Suggestion: recently revealed research
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, third, well, while, in fact, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07441860465 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99335481801 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525581395349 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7936975275 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.375 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136953739969 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423831798431 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040487787945 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845148040749 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00732226300218 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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