Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Living in cosmopolitan city, people will acquaint with new persons in their daily life whether intentionally or accidentally. Some of these acquaintances become a close relationship and others remain as a simple relationship or vanish by passing the time. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether people should keep away from their friends or being in contact with their friend so as to improve their relationship, different people adopt different attitudes depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. On the one hand, there are people who believe keeping away from their friend remind them how their relationship is valuable and improve their relationship; on the other hand, others believe that as long as people spend their time with their friend, they can develop more aspect of their relationship. As far I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only does it aid people discover their friends’ characters and differences but also does it give them the opportunity to help each other.
Discovering the friends’ characteristics improve the relationship. In fact, the character of the people varies from person to person depending on their family and culture and such differences are usually the cause of developing a relationship. Hence, discovering such differences help us to understand our friends in different situations. One the most important part of every relationship is discovering the things which makes friends happy or sad, therefore, in different situation people know how they should respond not to damage their relationship. For instance, I will never talk about my friends’ ugliness, if I know they will be sad or I will give them compliment if I know they will be happy. Subsequently, discovering the personality of friends helps people to make their relationship closer.
People develop their relationship when they are in difficult situations. In fact, one aspect of every relationship is support each other in get rid of difficulties encounter in the life. Such difficulties bring people close together and help them to develop their relationship. The most common situation is when people are sad about losing something or somebody like losing parents. In this situation, those friends who sympathy and help their friend overcoming such sadness will become close to their friend. Another situation is when people need their friends’ support in order to improve their life. Therefore, communicating with friends drastically develop a relationship.
To wrap it up, staying with friends help people to understand their friends’ importance not only by discovering their characters and personality but also by appreciating them in difficulties. Therefore, a relationship will become closer if people communicate with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...g the time. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether people should keep away from their frie...
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Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s or being in contact with their friend so as to improve their relationship, different p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53456221198 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19002538736 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440092165899 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5910817109 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.1 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231205815956 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977313413584 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606026271525 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171338559207 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446192722144 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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