Some say that people should make others (important/influential people or potential employers) know about their strengths and accomplishments, otherwise they will not have successful life. What is your opinion on this statement? Explain why.
When some people have special strengths or achieve accomplishments, they would expose them directly to the public, showing other people their positive side. These people are convinced that by doing so, they would lead a successful life. However, from my standpoint, I would argue that one can also have a successful life without necessarily showing their strengths and accomplishments to other people.
First of all, becoming successful is not only dependent on one’s strength and accomplishments; rather, it is made of multiple qualities of a person, such as confidence, determination, potential, etc. These qualities are all essential for one to achieve success, which can easily be found on those successful people. Without these factors, one would face obstacles on their ways to success even if they are showing others their strengths. For example, if a person gained many rewards on math competitions, but if the person lacks determination, he/she would give up quickly if they go to higher level contests and are beaten by others, deviating from the road to ultimate success.
What is more, a person without holding many accomplishments can also achieve success. Some people do have the potential to be success, yet their abilities are simply covered or underestimated by others. Take my friend Bob as an example. He majors in cyber security and is a typical introvert who do not like showing his abilities and strengths to others. But he is definitely the most hard-working student I have ever seen in my life, because he can sit in front of the computer studying for a whole day without having a single meal. Bob was not quite known by the students in the science department without any significant achievements, but he suddenly becomes the “red person”in our university a year ago when he successfully discovered a major data breach of our university’s website, which helps the school avoid millions of dollars financial loss.
To sum up, one should not expect to become successful only through showing his strengths and accomplishments to others, since it is not the only factor involved in one’s success and people with potentials can also become successful even if they haven’t achieved any accomplishments.
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Suggestion: ” in
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19944598338 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07642890234 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556786703601 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.8193491214 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.071428571 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237159466328 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981842703844 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758029591878 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169214737357 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749329990278 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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