Some say that people should make others (important / influential people or potential employers) know about their strengths and accomplishments. Otherwise, they will not have a successful life.
What is your opinion on this statement? Explain why.
In the wake of modernization, most people would not live solitarily, so interacting with others becomes an inseparable part of people's daily lives. From my perspective, showing strengths and accomplishments to others helps ensure a successful life.
First, the alienated mentality in modern society forces people to judge others based on superficial factors. Urbanization is a phenomenon that describes the continuous movement of people from rural areas to the metropolis. When too many strangers live closely together, they will not likely develop too strong a bond with one another since that would be too time-consuming. With this strangeness in mind, many would not invest much effort in getting to know others. And the result is that people will have limited choices in social interactions. In other words, many people would not carry out in-depth conversations with strangers. Instead, they prefer to judge others quickly. For example, resumes are effective instruments for potential employers to know about the qualities of job applicants. The achievements listed in resumes allow hiring managers to compare how valuable each candidate is and determine if they match the requirements and responsibilities of the position. Therefore, people who want to be successful at employment should display their abilities to their potential employers.
Second, strengths and accomplishments can help with social interactions. As social beings, people shares connections with each other in one way or another, which means everyone must socialize with others. Although it might sound cruel, one typically prefers to spend time with attractive people. Their attraction comes primarily from their ability to demonstrate desirable qualities, including their expertise or personal achievements. More often than not, these qualities can make social interactions more enjoyable. For instance, for a professional comedian, telling jokes to people will bring them enjoyment. And enjoyments like this can help make people popular within their social circle. However, if the same comedian decides not to share his humor, other people might find him dull and thus would not have the incentives to develop so robust a social relationship with him. That is to say, failing to display one's desirable qualities to others deprives people of being socially successful.
To conclude, actively showing what one is good at helps with career development and developing social connections.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62466487936 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02450181183 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600536193029 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8847402209 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3636363636 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283386302544 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844209071395 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519270239795 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158243340865 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838335562757 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.02 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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