Some scientists believe that students under the age of 12 should have different teachers every day like the students who are between 12-18 years old. Do you agree or disagree?
Scientists have been trying to find an effective methods of education to boost students' interest and performance duirng school days. In this regard, some of them suggested that students in elementary school (with the age of under 12) should have different teachers. In my own perspective, I do believe that this change in our educational system will facilitate the flourishing process of pupile's life.
First of all, children at the age of 7 to 12 have a sensibe character which brings them myriad difficulites to continue their education. In fact, the traditional belief is that students get used to their teacher at lower ages as if one member of their family. If they accept their teacher as a complete man, they will try hard to do their best in order to recieve more attention from their teacher. However, this action can occur in the oppostin direction which exactly happened to my younger brother. He has a shy character and some problems in his social life. When he went to school, he experienced a complete different atmosphere. Unfortunately he afraid of his teacher and could not accept him as a new person in his mind. Therefore, he did not do his homework and was not eager to continue his educations. If he had different teachers, for example 3 or 4 teachers, he would at least like one of them and this would help him not to give up his eduaction.
Secondly, having various teachers for different courses will increase the motiviation and consequently can help students to get good grades. In other words, differet teachers have differens manners and way of teaching, therefore, it will increase students interest because they find in absolutely interesting to communicate with different people. Based of recent discoveries, students at these ages have a stronge tendency to divertisification, as a result, each simple change that can boost their interest. My school life is a compelling example of this idea. I can remeber when I was at elementary school, I always tried hard to communicate with new students and make new friend. We had always one teacher and I was bored of him because I was aware of his approach and it was too easy for me to do those things that was important for him. However, the next year we had two teachers which I found how interesting it is.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanation, it is obvious that I think different teachers for students at the age of 7 to 12 is a perfect change. This change can lead to higher motiviation and also lower sensibility of these students. That's why we should tend do some changes in our schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'method'?
Suggestion: method
...s have been trying to find an effective methods of education to boost students interest...
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Message: You miss the verb here. You should rather write: 'he's afraid'.
Suggestion: he's afraid
...ete different atmosphere. Unfortunately he afraid of his teacher and could not accept him...
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Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...nd. We had always one teacher and I was bored of him because I was aware of his approach...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...so lower sensibility of these students. Thats why we should tend do some changes in o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, at least, for example, i think, in fact, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80269058296 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85822645444 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491031390135 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6133621372 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3636363636 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245448911279 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742026628838 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702607376117 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174328385586 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514456032234 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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