Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In the modern life, a good job can bring you money and also self-confident that can make us a successful man. In this regard, people are totally careful about the parameters that can ensure their successfulness such as studying hard in school and also the good relationship. In my own perspective, I do believe that the most crucial part of your job in the ability to communicate with others rather than any other issues.
Firstly, having a perfect confidence and the proper ability to relate others can strongly favor you in winning a job interview. In other words, the first step of getting a job is the interview part, therefore, everyone must have something to present at first. The more our influence on the interviewer the better result we could get. My own experience is an interesting example of this point. I have graduated in Computer engineering from the best university in my country with the first-grade mark. Sending myriad resume to various companies I was finally proposed to be in an interview. Due to the lack of appropriate communication, they thought that I am not capable enough to get the job, however, I was totally familiar with the job requirements. In contrast, the other person which was one my friend could get the job at last. He was just a normal student at university but he could introduce himself better than me as he said lately.
Secondly, After getting a job the next step in the annual promotion which is happening in all corporations. In fact, just having a job with a stable position during many years cannot be named success. All the individuals constantly try hard to be better and achieve the more key position in the life. I have another experience of not being promoted to a company. After sending numerous resumes and interviewing I was finally successful in getting a job in a normal company. I was working there as the first-grade engineer for 3 years. I was wondered that how my other coworkers can attain better position and increase their income but I am still in the same condition like the first day of working. As I noticed, I found that I do not communicate with my direct supervisor and event my coworkers. In fact, I did not know even their names and was not in contact with them at all. Therefore, If I were a little more watchful about my relation, I could be more successful in my occupation.
In sum, it is obvious from my explanation that I think having better relation can brings us more success. That is because of getting a good job and consequently promoting in that. That's why we should be aware of our social ability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: bring
...that I think having better relation can brings us more success. That is because of get...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, as to, i think, in contrast, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68052516411 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82144898701 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503282275711 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0605926333 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.56 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.28 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.56 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173377104122 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494313651802 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381759508542 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116951541201 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465433094622 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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