Parents should spend their time just playing games and sports with the kids or spend time on their children education.
which one do you agree?
The contemporary age is no stranger to the notion of emotional relationships between people especially, parents and their children. In particular, recent years have witnessed a surge in the indisputable role of spending time with the children in order to respond to their emotional demands. This controversial issue has raised serious debate among different walks of life. While some people underscore the fact that the best use of time is to play games and sports with the kids, my personal views tend to align with the opinion that in most cases it is beneficial for parents to spend their time for evolving their children in education. Depending on my own experiences, there are three primary reasons for this.
The initial impression that I get on why I do not prefer to spend the time to have fun playing games with my children is that they are playing most of their time in school with their friends; therefore they should have someone to help them in order to schedule their education. To clarify, most of the children are in a crucial age, which they are not completely aware of what the best is for their advance, and they must have a tutor to guide them. As an instance, when I was 15 years old I addicted to playing video games, and my scores declined conspicuously; as a result, my father tried to help me to reschedule my schoolwork, and after a while, I got A mark on most of my lessons.
In addition to the above-mentioned reason, I am convinced that parents have a lot of precious experiences in educational matters, which can be taught to children. That is to say, Because our parents had learned the lessons which we are learning now, and they know us well, they are able to solve our problems better than anyone else. I remember an instance in this regard that, most of the problems which I struggled to solve in my high school were being answered by my mother because she had the same issues when she was in my age. I am not completely persuaded to choose the second concept for this reason only.
Added to the points mentioned earlier in the essay, I tend to hold the idea that parents can monitor their kids' educational improvements themselves. To shed more light on the issue, I should point the fact that some children try to disguise their scores from their parents, and this will lead to decline their scores. When parents are involved closely with their children in their schoolwork, they can entirely evaluate their knowledge and rate of learning. As a case in point, about 5 Years ago I tutored my cousin for his university entrance exam, and I reported his weekly improvements to his parents. Therefore, they could take smart decision to convince him to try harder.
By way of encapsulating this notion, based on the arguments explore above, and with all due respect to the people who believe that parents should play with their children in their free time, I once again reaffirm my position that educational affairs of the kids are the most vital subject which parents must notice. In a way, I believe I owe my whole life to my parents who put a lot of time in my education.
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Suggestion:
... are three primary reasons for this. The initial impression that I get on why...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in particular, as a result, in most cases, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65217391304 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62585689798 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48731884058 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8941538313 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.157894737 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0526315789 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384222121579 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120095936502 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129021019909 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230316535587 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997346902999 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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