Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In the modern life, a good job can bring you money and also self-confident that can make you a successful man. In this regard, people are totally careful about the parameters that can ensure their successfulness such as studying hard in school and also the good relationship. In my own perspective, I do believe that the most crucial part of your job in the ability to communicate with others rather than any other issues.
Firstly, having a perfect confident and the proper ability to relate others can strongly help you in winning a job interview. In other words, the first step of getting a job is the interview part, therefore, everyone must be skillful enough to present himself. Having this point in mind that the interviewer in a human and can be affected by our presentation, we can find a suitable approach to succeed. My own experience is an interesting example of this point. I have graduated in computer engineering from the best university in my country with the first-grade mark. Sending myriad resume to various companies I was finally invited to attend an interview. Due to the lack of appropriate communication, they thought that I am not capable enough to get the job; however, I was totally familiar with the job requirements. In contrast, the other person which was one my university friend could get the job. He was just an ordinary student but he could present himself better that me as he said lately. It obviously demonstrates the effectiveness of having other social ability that is needed in each individual occupation.
Secondly, after getting a job the next step in the annual promotion which happens in all corporations. In fact, just having a job with a stable position during many years not only cannot be named success but also can be a kind failure. All the individuals constantly try hard to achieve higher positions in their working life. I have another experience of not being promoted to a company. After sending numerous resumes and interviewing I was finally successful in getting a job in a company. I was working there as the first-grade engineer for more than 3 years. I was wondered that how my other colleagues have promoted and their income have increased but I was still in the same condition like my first day of work. As I noticed, I found that I do not communicate with my direct supervisor and event my coworkers. In fact, I did not even talk to them during the day and know their names at all. This story reveals that working hard and having good grades in school is just one side of the success and cannot guarantee the prosperity.
In sum, it is obvious from my explanation that I think having better relation can brings us more success. That is because of getting a good job and consequently promoting in that. That's why we should strengthen our social ability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: bring
...that I think having better relation can brings us more success. That is because of get...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...job and consequently promoting in that. Thats why we should strengthen our social abi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, as to, i think, in contrast, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7693877551 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82845731136 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504081632653 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9892039851 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8846153846 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165295379146 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476011352208 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424379749559 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115562421627 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542106576593 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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