Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A great deal of attention is attracted to the future problem of human societies’ transportation systems dealing with the number of existed cars. There are a number of people who subscribe to the theory that cars start to disappear in future, however, others disagree. In my own perspective, I do believe that we will experience days having fewer cars because of two main reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First of all, nowadays the increased population have resulted in some unfavorable consequences like the high number of cars. In other words, the huge number of people have demanded more comfort like personal cars during the last ten years. Therefore, it produced terrible traffic jams in most big cities. My hometown, Shanghai, is a compelling example of what is going to be happed in future in lower scale. We have terrible traffic problems which cause great hours spending in streets, as a result, authorities have established new rules which confine the use of cars and motorcycles in particular area of the city and also give subside to public transportation I think this kind of rules will be more serious in the next twenty years and the forbidden areas will be enlarged in order to regulator the numerous cars. These events will make people less eager to use their private cars because of the low area of their usage.
Secondly, the huge amount of produced gases from cars will put all the human beings’ life in danger. In future, on one hand, most of the international associations will come to an agreement to increase the tax of using cars and on the other hand, they will lower the expanse of public transportation by broadening the new technologies of high-speed trains and buses. Consequently, people find their private automobiles useless. For instance, in my country, China, there is a city that using public transportation is not only free of charge but also faster. With the advent of new high-speed trains, people can travel at the speed of 300 Km per hours, the fastest train in the world, which brings a huge amount of satisfaction in my city. As a result, these kinds of town will develop in future and use of these types of cars will be out of date.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanation, it is obvious that I do believe the number of cars will be reduced surprisingly. This is just because of the growing population which brings us terrible traffic jams and also environmental problems that both cause the restriction of cars. I think we should think of another way of transportation in next twenty years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in particular, kind of, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89749430524 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85929352945 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503416856492 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.156295617 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.444444444 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2777777778 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211491570339 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621430724997 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549176646721 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12683291714 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278941273917 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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