Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
A great deal of attention has been attracted to the behavior of teenagers coping with the fact that whether TV programs have more positive or negative effect on their behavior. Personally, I, for one, subscribe to the idea that various programs shown on TV and other places such as cinema can affect young people's behavior in a positive way. To substantiate this view point, two reasons are elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, under no circumstance can a typical movie or TV show be displayed unless it has already taken the required permission from the related authorities. In other world, the content of the programs are generally based on morality and aims to improve behavior of humans not to adversely affect them. My younger brother's life can illustrate this point clearly. Being at the age of 7, he demonstrated a rude behavior in his communication with me and my family. On the other hand, receiving some pieces of advice from his school consultants, we prepared some special movies and TV shows to improve his behavior. After just spending some months, my brother started to imitate the behavior of his favorite characters in those cartoons, and since all of them were the hero of the story and behave based of mural principals, my brother's behavior modified in a positive way. If my brother has not watched those movies, his behavior would not be changed in a positive way.
Secondly, it is crystal clear that one of the main goal of art is to improve the social and personal behavior of individuals, therefore, film makers make effort to achieve this goal. In fact, all stories have some good and bad character and they are usually in a conflict during the movie. However, directors have already placed every events in a way that at last the power of kindness or other positive values overcome the evils. Being in such an atmosphere, teenagers and young children obviously notice that how positive characters are rewarded at the end and how negative character are punished. Therefore, they logically do not tend to be punished and want to receive some gifts and prizes from other, and consequently, they incline to take the positive points of the positive character and avoid the negative points of negative character. In this way, movies contributes to the improvement of teenagers behavior.
In conclusion, above from aforementioned explanation, I do believe that programs shown on TV or other Medias can perfectly provides young people with positive source of information. This is because the film makers have a general goal to modify people behavior and also the governors' role to observe and adopt rules for directors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01573033708 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74336835672 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523595505618 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3668210857 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183668412665 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596584394291 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511008397894 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128937535168 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454664010845 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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