At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus, such as how many hours that the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, students almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
It is widely known that campus decisions are of great significance to students. So every school takes them seriously. Some schools will allow students make decisions that affect daily life of everyone in the campus, while others will choose to let those decisions made by specific experts. Personally, I am convinced that decisions should be more likely to be made by students themselves.
It is not hard to discover that decisions made by students will bring about a number of benefits. Primarily, students are more familiar with the campus’ circumstance so that they may make decisions which are more reasonable to them. There is no doubt that campus is the place where students live. Therefore, they know what to do is the most satisfactory choice. That is to say, they are the ones who can exactly make reasonable choices for the collective students. On top of that, since these issues are more related to students themselves, they may be more motivated to do the job. For students may improve their environment by themselves, they will be more enthusiastic than those experts. For example, when it comes to the issue of stuff like campus cafeteria which is related to their diets they will certainly be stimulated to do the job.
Admittedly, some advantages can also be presented when experts make the decisions. Most importantly, experts are more professional that they are able to make better decisions to the campus. Because different people specialize in different fields that they good at, they may make the correct choice for the entire campus but not students as just a part of the campus. For instance, they may cut down the budget when the income of school is very limited.
Generally speaking, decisions should be indeed made by students themselves but not by experts. Notwithstanding, I believe that different school should base on their own situation to make the choices as in some school students may not be active about these events or some schools cannot afford to pay for the cost of inviting experts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, on top of that, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99705882353 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72803432535 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479411764706 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9447074286 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3888888889 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274350261914 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933956420905 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574225317744 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186999600851 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504678933145 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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