TPO-45-integrated-writing
In the passage, it is proposed that some skeptics cast doubt that the structures were created by bees. In contrast, the lecturer puts forth that the structures were made by bees.
First of all, in the passage, it is thought to be truth that there are no fossils of bees that can be found. Plus, the earliest found bees' bodies are just half as old as the fossilized structures. Whereas, the professor opposes that the reason why there are no bees' fossils is they were not given conditions to be preserved. Bees' fossils need the liquid produced by a specific kind of trees to be preserved. And those trees might not exist at that time.
Secondly, the absence of flowering plants at that time is presented to be one of the reasons why skeptics think so. Notwithstanding, the professor provides a contradictory point that bees did exist before the presence of the flowering plants. At that time, bees mostly feed on non-flowering plants to survive. Then after the advent of flowering plants, bees started to feed on them.
Thirdly, the skeptics indicates that the structure is lack of details like spiral pattern and stuff like that for modern bee nests are closed by caps that have a spiral pattern. Nevertheless, according to the professor, although the nests found in Arizona are lack of some details. There is a fact that can prove that the skeptics are incorrect which is that those nests all have the same waterproof materials.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 248 250
No. of Characters: 1152 1200
No. of Different Words: 123 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.645 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.507 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, in contrast, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1193.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81048387097 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6181715854 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520161290323 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1724466979 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2142857143 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946655583182 0.272083759551 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351537792493 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222480283419 0.0662205650399 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0530102737722 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139707809461 0.0443174109184 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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