Some young adults want dependence from parents as soon as possible while the others prefer living with their family for long time. Say which of them you prefer and why? Explain it with specific examples.
Some argue that living independently enable one to be a better version of themself, while others counter this claim by stating that living with a family makes one more responsive to the need of others. In my own personal opinion, I believe that being dependent as soon as possible is a much better choice than living with family for long time for several reasons. I will develop my opinions in the following paragraphs.
First of all, independence gives us the freedom to pursue our dreams. I'll be the first one to admit that living with family does not necessarily means utter restriction and bondage from our own will. However, we must admit that the choice of doing what we want is much more in independent life. I have to admit that my own experience has profoundly influenced my thinking on this matter. You see, just after I graduated I was offered my dream job of software engineering in New york and I am quite sure I would have taken it. However, because of my family responsibility I could not just leave them and move to a far away city. As, a result I had to back down from my dream job.
In addition to the freedom, I believe that living alone will also prepare us for bad times. This is because, being independent means facing new responsibilities alone. We do not have the luxury of asking help from others and no matter what it is, we need to face it. Let me take my friend's personal experience to illustrate this. A while back one of my best friend shared a very interesting experience. He used to live alone far way from his family because of his work. But due to some unseen circumstances he lost his job and eventually become broke. Since, he didn't had the economic support from his family, his only option was to be strong mad make it on his own. And this was what he did. Although he struggled for some time, he never gave up and finally got another work opportunity. This entire experience taught him a very special lesson. Now he is stronger than ever and can easily overcome similar hurdle in the near future. This experience shows us an additional merit of living alone and surviving on our own.
Finally, living with family for long period may make one lazy or irresponsible. To be more specific, in a family there are others who can make up for us, when we do not want to perform a task. I'll be the first one to admit that this is not always a bad thing. Yet, over-dependence on other family members may ultimately make us lazy. For instance, let us consider a child who is excessively pampered by his family. This will inevitably proscribe the child from any learning opportunity and the child will continue being dependent on others for doing his work. This relation can be extended to the simialr condition of living with a family and living independently.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I'm of the opinion that in most of the cases living independently far outweighs living with family. We have better freedom for exploring our options, more opportunity of learning from our experiences and walking on a path of self-development and progression.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...onsive to the need of others. In my own personal opinion, I believe that being dependent as soon...
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...es us the freedom to pursue our dreams. Ill be the first one to admit that living w...
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...living with family does not necessarily means utter restriction and bondage from our ...
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...leave them and move to a far away city. As, a result I had to back down from m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, while, as to, for instance, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2573.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63603603604 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.719290836 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488288288288 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6057753003 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.40625 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.34375 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1875 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20613325823 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540182806246 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600173957665 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135286487223 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666045359741 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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