Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do think is better?
There is often said that most adults are hurrying to start to live separate from their parents. Others say that some of them choose to be with their nuclear family for a longer period. I strongly believe that to begin living on their own without the parents helps us to rise as a successful individual.
As far as I am concerned a response to this idea varies in every country. In eastern culture, for example in Uzbekistan, staying with the parents is accepted as a normal behavior and usually the youngest son will live with them forever so the house where they live is going to him as a heritance automatically. No other child of family are going to fight for this house with exception of some rare situations. There is the reason of course, why other children tolerate this because anyway they will have one also as a gift or will get huge support from their parents. The Uzbek parents strive all their life to create a decent standard of living for each of their children and therefore they have less time to travel or enjoy their life in retirement. On top of that some of them might earn an illness which hinders to reside properly. And some children take this sacrifices as granted and not value them.
On the other side adult independent child could achieve the success that those people who are dwelling with their families can only dream of. Obviously at the beginning it is going to be tough leaving our comfort zone. For example for the adult child in the USA it is normal situation to become independent and it sounds strange when they continue living in parents’ house. Most of them have clear view of their future and certain goals so they follow them. I am convinced that the children will have a mature mindset and be mentally ready for the independent life, if they know from early age that they are going to live separate from their parents when they reach the age of 18.
All in all to be independent from parents has a huge positive impact for the future success of an individual.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to rise as a successful individual. As far as I am concerned a response to thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, if, so, therefore, well, for example, of course, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5635359116 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35294909926 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505524861878 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4840691379 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.25 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332173381556 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112366987786 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724743329263 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215248590734 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778068294195 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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