Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects to living with your parents for a prolonged time. If I was forced to choose, I would definitely prefer getting independence from my parents as soon as I can. There are a number of reasons for my preference on which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think that being dependent on your family for longer than it is required leads to hindrance in your personal development. By staying in the comfort zone, under the umbrella of their parents, people do not learn important life skills. These life skills, if not learned properly, makes life difficult when the person has to finally go independent. I have to mention that my opinion on this matter comes from a personal experience. Three years ago, when I left my parent's home to attend college, I lacked basic skills like cooking and finance. It is known that college does not give you time to be at rest with all the assignments and tests. At first, I survived by ordering food from outside but soon its effect became noticeable on my wallet. I had to learn cooking while studying full-time and I would end the day with little to no energy left. If I had become independent earlier, when I had more time and less academic pressure, the initial years would have passed more breezily.
Secondly, I believe that there comes a point in life when the elder and the younger generation cannot come to terms with each other's behavior and choices. The young blood has more energy and is more temperamental, the older faces difficulties in dealing with the changes in their life. This creates a tension in the family which leads to fights and a negative atmosphere in the house. Drawing from a personal example, when I was 18, my friends and I used to play video-games late at night. Since we had studies and work to attend in the daytime, we could only find sufficient time at night to get together and play a few games. This late night gaming became bothersome for my parents and we used to have many fights on the topic. This led to problems like anger issues and bad attitudes towards each other.
To sum it up, I do think that there are positives to living with your family members for a longer span, but I still strongly believe that the pros outweigh the cons when it comes to being independent as soon as possible. I think this way because independence can help a lot in developing necessary survival skills and it is prudent to be aware of the generation gap between the young adults and their parents and the issues the gap carries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cook'.
Suggestion: to cook
...noticeable on my wallet. I had to learn cooking while studying full-time and I would en...
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Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...neration cannot come to terms with each others behavior and choices. The young blood h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, as for, as to, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58315334773 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51055364693 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51403887689 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7314826009 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.047619048 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291618070567 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759274193478 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513918249724 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184651881034 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513322850266 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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