Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time Which of these solutions do you think is better Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some might argue saying that young adults should be free from the influence of their parents with the view that they might have so called independence. However, in my opinion, I think young adults should prefer to live with their parents for a extended period of time or even till death. I think this way because of following two main reasons.

First of all, living together and sharing dining for the long time helps to transfer the knowledge and experience of parents to their childrens. For example, from the early age- stone age- the experience of the elderly people has been extremely important. In this present world, children also need such information regarding their experience so that they don't repeat the same mistakes. If the children get freedom at early age, then he/she might not be fully aware of the outside world and he/she might suffer alot. Therefore, it is crucial that the children stick with parents as longer as possilble.

Another reason is that parents have fostered their children in early stages despite different tribulation and thus they shouldn't be left on their own. Everyperson needs to respect their parents and should not let them suffer during dotage. This way not only they show the good moral character but also they set the emergence of the new cycle of caring their parents. If there is lack of such behavior then there would be trend of leaving their parents in the name of independence; and eventually, the children suffer from his/her own fate when he/she becomes parent in the future. So, it is required to maintain healthy relation among the child and their parents which would lead to the twin benifit to both parents and children.

To sum up, both the aspects of the given topic are highly debatable. Although some might argue that the young ones should get independence from their parents as soon as possible, I still contend that they should prefer to live with their own family as it has several advantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...regarding their experience so that they dont repeat the same mistakes. If the childr...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...e children stick with parents as longer as possilble. Another reason is that pa...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
...ite different tribulation and thus they shouldnt be left on their own. Everyperson needs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, i think, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87164179104 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35630000197 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546268656716 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3476899295 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304579597648 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105207938413 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962021713246 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207730358598 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845524781848 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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