Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better. Use specific reasons and examples to support your examples.
Young adults generally love to explore new things. The feeling of living without any form of restrictions is very much anticipated especially by young people growing up into adults. However, many are concerned about living independently from their parents just yet. I totally feel it is better for young people to live with their loved ones for a long time because they are not yet fully mature to stay alone and to handle life dealings themselves.
To begin with, emerging adults are not yet emotionally and psychologically stable to live away from their families. These young adults may not really know the consequences of some of their actions and these could result in them getting into bigger problems. For example, my niece who is a college student decided to live alone independent of her parents. One day, I went to visit her in her apartment only to find out that she was living with her school boyfriend. I was disappointed upon seeing this, and I spoke to her about the consequences of this action. She broke down in tears and thanked me for enlightening her. She thereafter moved back into her parent’s house where such actions cannot be tolerated. Therefore, it is better for young adults to stay for a longer time with their parents.
Next, living with our family guarantees that we eat healthy meals. Most college students living alone are usually either too tired or too busy to cook a good meal. This makes them settle for junk or buying food from food vendors which is usually expensive. Whereas, there is always a well-prepared meal to get when living with your parents. I remember when I was a college grade one student, I lived alone and I barely have time to prepare good meals. This made me settle for junk food and as a result, I put on a lot of weight. My parents were not comfortable with my lifestyle and they decided that I move back into our family house. Just within a short while after moving back into my parent’s house, I got back in shape and felt healthier.
Last, living with your family reduces the chances of falling into depression. A lot of young adults living alone are usually lonely as they are most times no one to talk to while at home. So, therefore, it is easy for them to be depressed. For example, aside from my parents and siblings, I have some aunties and uncles living with us. This makes my house very lively and there is always someone to talk to or share your challenges with. Talking to someone about your challenges no doubt eases a lot of stress.
To sum up, I can say without any modicum of equivocation that young adults should spend longer time living with their family as this will save them from making wrong decisions, help them eat healthy meals, and keep them from falling into depression.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, no doubt, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64489795918 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45652239776 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495918367347 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7388940236 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2962962963 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1481481481 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312096137081 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920290395688 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778083078736 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192761121306 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491542773337 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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