I utterly agree with the concept that children should become independent as soon as possible. The main reason why I believe this way is according to the fact that financial pressures on families are constantly increasing. Moreover, this way children will start benefiting from the positive changes in their personalities and feel more self-satisfied.
First, I think that the financial pressure on families is rapidly increasing and it is not just fair to ask them to support their children even after graduation. Children should understand that their parents are struggling will financial issues and bearing their burden. They should have more sympathy, give the right to their parents and try to support themselves instead of asking for more money from them.
Furthermore, the sooner they get independent the sooner they can benefit from other personality features followed after it. Children after becoming independent, learn to be more responsible about their lives, manage their budgets more efficiently and even start planning for their future. Personally saying, when I was living with my parents I thought I could get as much money as I wanted by simply asking for it and never worried about anything but, now that I have a limited income I plan for my salary a month or two before getting it.
At last, children will experience the feeling of self-satisfaction and become more confident about themselves after becoming independent which, is amazing. When children start working and earn their own money feel more confident, satisfied and influential. For example, when they buy a gift or even a piece of furniture for their own houses they feel more joy and happiness and because they will think that they deserve that thing that they bought for themselves will feel more proud of themselves.
In conclusion, there are numerous benefits for getting independent and the sooner the better. The justified right of parents for getting free of their childrens’ expenses, the benefit of other personality features followed by independent as well as the great feeling of the self-satisfaction are the main reasons why children should get independent of their family as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23796033994 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89539756286 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478753541076 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0616951308 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.071428571 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223691840297 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921890759839 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433086007102 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144573014869 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419287498018 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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