Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Participating in sports for children, as well as for adults, can have positive and negative aspects. From the one side, sport can help to develop valuable skills. On the other hand, some sports activities can lead to injuries and other health problems. Overall, I personally think that spending a lot of time on sports is beneficial for children. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
First of all, participating in sports makes children patient in achieving their goals. It is no secret, that to succeed in any sport, a sportsman has to practice again and again. He/she has to start from the very basics and improve gradually. If the child is capable of pursuing this routine and enhancing in the sport, he/she will eventually understand that through the hard work he /she can excel in the same way in any field. For example, I am a former volleyball player. Back in the school, I practiced playing volleyball a lot. I had to master every skill patiently and through a large effort. Today, it is a not a big deal for me to study constantly for many hours a day to pass the TOEFL test. I know that in the result, my hard work will be paid off. Although, children, who spent a myriad of time training, sometimes lack the opportunity to have fun with their friends, in the future will benefit from the habit of the constant practicing. To that end, the regular practicing in the childhood helps people to follow their aims throughout their lives.
Secondly, participating in sports actively lets students evolve great communication skills. A variety of sports are the team activities. Through the constant communication with the teammates, a child will be able to learn about people`s behavior and how to deal with it. As much the child connects with others, as much he/she feels comfortable in any society. Nowadays, the ability to communicate effectively is indispensable to succeed in life, since the modern business mainly based on the teamwork. If a person is not capable of socializing quickly in a new work environment, he/she will hesitate to ask questions about the features of the new job from colleagues and thus, the process of adaptation to the new workplace could take a long time. So, the continuous connection with peers while practicing sports is advantageous for children in terms of obtaining crucial social experience.
To conclude, I think that disadvantageous of spending a great amount of children`s time practicing sports, fade in front of the advantageous. This is because, even sometimes children can get hurt during the training and do not have a quite time for the leisure with their friends, through the extend practicing they will acquire important skills to become successful adults.
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...the leisure with their friends, through the extend practicing they will acquire important ...
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Suggestion:
...ant skills to become successful adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, as for, as to, even so, for example, i feel, i think, as well as, first of all, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93492407809 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88645113786 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542299349241 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4381240664 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.44 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173583771333 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481298320855 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668072102746 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125425688792 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788872893898 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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