Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?1、to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community2、learning to play a sport3、learning to play a musical

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Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1、to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2、learning to play a sport
3、learning to play a musical instrument

I believe that sports have the most benefit because of 1.) It keeps you healthy 2.) you have a greater chance of getting into great universities/colleges & 3.) you can play professionally as your career which pays really well.
1.) Health in sports:
sports benefit your health by keeping athletes fit and prevent many health diseases.that are focused on playing professionally

2.) many colleges are mainly looking for athletes looking forward to playing professionally. if you are really good at the sport you are playing in many college directors are invited to see you play and if they think you would be a good person to play for their team then maybe they will offer fully paid scholarship to whatever college you decide to go to and pay off the classes for the subject/career path you would like to pursue professionally.
3.) Again as I said colleges are always helping their students to continue playing the sport professionally and maybe get into a major sports leagues such as NFL, NHL, NBL.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, really, so, then, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 52.1666666667 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 1977.66487455 42% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 170.0 407.700716846 42% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89411764706 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04222869496 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 212.727598566 48% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 618.680645161 39% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.9861101367 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122131830538 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620681552973 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407086491744 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0633504591476 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043776294206 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 86.8835125448 29% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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