Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1、to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2、learning to play a sport
3、learning to play a musical instrument
Education is a very important key in everyone's life, especially on our children. Some parents may think that having the kids at home doing nothing is better instead of having them outside of the house. In my opinion, young kids can use their free time after school on learning and playing a musical instrument for two reasons, such as learning patience and fine motor skills developing.
In the first place, young people have a lot of energy most of the time and sometimes they do not know how to be patient. Libraries have some projects that students may help from it, such as music classes that are affordable for many of the parents. The art of playing a musical flute or piano, such as, may help the student to be concentrated and dedicated to that special moment. However, the perseverance of the child when playing will make them more relax and for consequence more patience.
In the second reason, the student when practicing the guitar will help the child to develop fine motor skills. For instance, my cousin is a special child and very hyperactive, since, in the afternoon there was no more school before he used to run around the house non-stoping, after my aunt enrolls him in this after school program where he learned how to play the guitar, he really likes it.
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...ience and fine motor skills developing. In the first place, young people have a ...
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...elax and for consequence more patience. In the second reason, the student when p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, really, second, so, for instance, such as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 225.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70666666667 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44797321054 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608888888889 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 618.680645161 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9247731056 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2222222222 5.45110844103 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228479948857 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854823707989 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069605857871 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155754499062 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727757821787 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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