Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the following activities would be most beneficial for young people (age 14-18) to do in their spare time? Why?
Getting practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
Learning to play a sport
Learning to play a musical instrument
The world is rapidly developing, and correspondingly, the importance of personal quality can never be exaggerated. when it comes to a controversial issue about whether the honesty is the most significant character of a student organization, people hold different views, depending on personal experience, personality types and emotional concerns. As for me, I think obsessive honesty is not good for anybody.
Admittedly, honesty is usually appreciated as a great virtue, which makes it easier for an organization to succeed. An honest person can gain trust easily from others, so other team members are easier to follow. With this strong bond established, the work that the honesty one distributed will be completed quite well. however, to say honesty is the most important character is definitely an overstatement. obsessive honesty can lead to harm to oneself and even the whole team or club. Why is this so? if a person being honest with his competitor, the opposite party will know the secret plan. With the plan leaked, the precious fruits will be plagiarized, causing catastrophic results to the whole organization. In this regard, I will refer to myself. when I was a freshman in the Science club in my fresh year, I mentioned it by accident to my best friend lisa that my club needed some rabbits for the physiology experience. however, I ignored that lisa had joined in the Nature club, one of our competitive organizations. With the plan leaked by lisa, our competitor bought all the amount of rabbits we needed. As a result, our experience had to stop, which just put our club back at square one. And each time after, when I saw lisa again, there was a certain embarrassment between us.
From my perspective, being responsible should be the most crucial factor for an organization or club. it is clear that a responsible person can help to maintain the stability of a team. With some errors happened, if a member does not admit the mistake himself, it is actually equal to not taking the responsibility for his own behavior. Then how would anyone be willing to work for the person? how could the person keep the cohesion of the entire group? my best friend frank worked in the students’ Union club for about one year when entering Wu Han University. And according to him, whenever the students complained about the burden of working, the president always attributed the problem to other team members; he never checked on whether there was something wrong with his arrangement of the working time. Gradually, the group members felt so disappointed that they started to seek for opportunities in other students’ clubs. Last time when I met frank, he told me that he was ready to leave, and he did not feel sorry at all.
my idea is thus quite clear: a successful organization should have a group of responsible members rather than some honest ones
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, so, then, thus, well, as for, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93388429752 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.907537973 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54958677686 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0847367871 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4444444444 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9259259259 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136294267877 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368990915183 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282513660927 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0774182768464 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284380886594 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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