spending too much time on personal enjoyment
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of spending too much time on personal enjoyment and doing things that we like to do. But it is my firm belief that people today spend more time on doing things that like rather than doing things they should do. For a number of reasons and I will develop my agreement in this matter in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is the development of technology. With inventing different instruments in our life, lt is so easy to do your responsible or other things that you should do as soon as possible. This kind of lifestyle tempts people to enjoy their time more and do their works by spending less time on them. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, I remember when I was a little girl my mom spend more time making food and she spent all the time in the kitchen, but today she cooking very fast with new facilities like a microwave or digital oven.
Secondly, I believe that making money is not so hard as a past, this kind of issue makes people more comfortable about life and they prefer to spend time for enjoyment. Today people can gain money from digital marketing or easy ways and it is so popular and easy. Drawing from my own experience, always I going to coffee shop and hanging out with my friends and I am so easy about money because I have an online website that cover my financial life without spending more hard time on it and I am so comfortable in my lifestyle.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly think that people spend less time on the things they should do, and life is easy and active now because of development in technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45425867508 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44241870883 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507886435331 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0309887447 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252429791224 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097052068914 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114427940374 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158892400374 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735716605409 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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