Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of choose jobs that are very different from our parents. In this regard, people's opinions are divided as to whether children should choose jobs that are similar to their parents or not. Despite the fact that most children want to show them independent and free thinkers it is my firm conviction that its good for children to choose occupations similar to their parents. For a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that in this matter children will find a job position more easily than others. I mean, if people working for years in one situation they making a lot of strong connections during time working and their experience can be helpful for future. With such a background in the parent's resume their children can find a proper career far from problems that other people struggle in gaining a position. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. After graduating my friend and I were looking for a great occupation as a teacher. My parents are engineers in a cotton company in the same way, my friend's parents are teachers in high school. After a while, she got a position in elementary school and I was without any job for months. She claimed that his father had provided a job as a teacher for her.
Second, if children find a career like their parents, they have advantage of using their experiments and knowledge. In different positions young employees have numerous challenges with their work and parent's knowledge is a really precious option for children. Moreover, they can improve their skill and performance by learning from their mother and father. As a result, I commonly believe such knowledge widen one's horizon for higher performance as a professional worker.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that following parent's way in choose a job, not only offers secure job opportunities but also learning from their experience for being successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is regard, peoples opinions are divided as to whether children should choose jobs that are si...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...I commonly believe such knowledge widen ones horizon for higher performance as a pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, while, as to, i mean, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93447293447 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71908927433 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3362802102 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.882352941 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424277338214 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132786602246 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992443543324 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286266806935 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795963231232 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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