Students should spend a year to travel or to work before their go to college or university.
Some people contend that student should directly step into university after college entrance examination. However, I hold the opposite view that they need to gap for a spell to think about their decisions and develop some capacity required in this society.
Admittedly, some voices rise that educational performance is the only determinant for student's career. With the rapid advancement of modern society, increasing number of graduates are rushing into job market. Therefore, it is not surprising that student should not put their valuable time on other things irrelevant with their studying. However, in my opinion, even though education is so significant now that it will decides the life standards of people, stepping into university life is negative for students' passion in studying. After long period of studying with highly pressure, students have to refresh themselves, which would make them get motivated and push them to learn more. Blindly focusing on studying would only backfire their performance.
In great contrast, spending time on traveling or working, even simply having a rest have certain benefits on students, as such behaviors would give them a time to rethink their educational situation and consider what career they would like to be inducted. In fact, students would be less likely to really think about which occupation they are interested in, because they have bombarded with endless assignments and numerous classes on variety subjects, especially in China. To be more specific, before I was entering the university, my parents persuaded me to take part in the internship to have a good understanding of working contend and environment. Thus, I started my internship in a bank where the people were quite nice and they imparted a lot financial knowledge to me, all of which gave me a chance to get accessed to whole finance industry. After that, I made determinant that I was willing to become a financial student in the college.
More importantly, dedicating themselves into working is an excellent way for students to be independent. In the process of taking working, each student has to encounter with the fact that they would arrange everything on their own, instead of simply implementing their parents’ instructions, which is definitely an arduous challenge for them. Go back to the example stated above. During that period of internship, everyday teem with various events so that I had to plan each thing in advance, like handling with mission relegated by immediate superior, cooking for myself and acquiring education to expand my knowledge structure after work. I also needed to take into consideration the most efficient way of accomplishing those things smoothly, during which there is no doubt that I developed the independence and became more premature than peers.
In a nutshell, I still remain that it is a right choice for students to experience a spell of completely new life disparate from the identity of students. Anyone who has such experience would accommodate the university life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'decide'
Suggestion: decide
...tion is so significant now that it will decides the life standards of people, stepping ...
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Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...bove. During that period of internship, everyday teem with various events so that I had ...
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Line 7, column 850, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and became more premature than peers. In a nutshell, I still remain that it is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, really, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, in fact, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27572016461 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8790118751 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565843621399 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0292120832 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.2 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214217142792 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620988796526 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514674049964 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111122551759 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329322307546 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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