Arts play an essential role in our lives. When we are mentally depressed, arts give us a hope to live. Therefore, the significance of arts should be taught at school. I will explore my viewpoint to support the presented idea in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, children can learn how to appreciate great works of art. When I visited the Louvre museum of art in Paris, I was overwhelmed by its solemness. I was surrounded with great masterpieces ranging from the ancient period to the contemporary era. When I saw works of Leonard da Vinci, I was totally enticed and mesmerized by their beauty. However, not knowing a bit about works of contemporary artists, I felt almost nothing about them. I regretted, then, that I could have enjoyed looking at them with the knowledge to help me interpret, understand, and appreciate them in a proper manner. This experience brings me home to the idea that education about arts are so important that teachers should teach subjects such as arts or music at school.
Another reason to support the statement is that arts have the power to relax us. Personally, I often visit museums every weekends. This is because my work is so demanding that I get truly fatigued for it and I need something refreshing during weekends. Therefore, this habit of going to museums is crucial for me, for it makes me refreshed and ready for the coming weekdays. Drawing from this example, arts function as a means to take us away from the reality and we can expose ourselves to the true beauty, healing us to our hearts' content. Teaching children subjects of arts involves teaching children how to escape from the agonizing reality, probably preventing them from committing suicide.
From these perspectives, children should get education about arts. Admittedly, children are busy studying other subjects like science and math. However, the importance of arts is no less important and beneficial than those subjects from those reasons above. Therefore, I am convinced that subjects such as art, music and drama should be included in school curriculum.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...erpret, understand, and appreciate them in a proper manner. This experience brings me home to the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00867052023 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76997000044 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56936416185 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7312340738 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5238095238 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4761904762 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240234346635 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717490129165 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978218879053 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15759100165 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846747451413 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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