Knowledge is a fundamental point for success in a future job. If you are a well-informed person, you would earn success in your job. some people think that for success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school, others disagree. In my view, it is better to study hard in school for two important reasons.
First, it creates other abilities including the relationship with others. If you study hard, you learn a lot of things that help you to improve your character and you are able to have a proper relationship with others. For example, when I was in university, I had friends who study a lot and he had a lot of information. He could talk well with others and everyone enjoyed to talk with him. This experience taught me that with a hard study we can improve our other abilities.
Second, without proper information, you can not succeed in your job. A person without knowledge cannot solve the problems and do the task given to him. For instance, I tried so hard in university and get authentic data wherever that I can to achieve. When I started my job in a factory which produces cars' parts, always I able to solve the problems. I am doing my job well and I find a solution for every single problem. From this, I learned that if you want to improve your job, you must attain proper information.
In sum, I think that it is better to study hard in school for two important reasons. Not only it creates other abilities including the relationship with others, but also without proper information, you can not succeed in your job. I believe that all of us must study hard in school to gain success in a future job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50980392157 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58575011077 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454248366013 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 425.7 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2673096003 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347904794511 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127603999476 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129313750196 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264884101614 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177589729406 0.0645574589148 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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