successful people try new things and takes risks.
It is crystal clear that being successful is the ultimate goal of mankind. Individuals go universities, study different courses, and work hard in order to seek their fortune--success. In this regard, some people believe that it stands to reason that taking risks and trying new issues are the strategies of a successful person, while others hold the opposite view, and saying that one should follow stable path in order to be successful. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude for a quite a few reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that since the dawn of humanity, human beings have been engaged so as to find ways in order to improve their lives and seek their fortune, success; indeed, it was the sense of modifying which stimulate prehistoric individuals to abandon their caves to discover world, resulting a great deal of development in astronomy, medical science, to name but a few, which completely have affected our lives. All of these incomes have to with people who discriminated chances and opportunities in proper time and exploited them in an efficient manner. Unless these people wanted to try new points and take risks, there were not these great progresses in the world.
Another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that trying new things gives a person an opportunity to acquire valuable information such as experience, higher career status, and wealth, which paves the way for being success. As a point in view, I managed to take a high job position in the company I am working now due to my information, which I attained them by working in different job positions.
Last but not the least, life is a burdensome full of ups and downs. I think that theses fluctuation gives meaning to it--or, to put it in another way, a person doing a constant and routine things every day does not appropriately enjoy the life. According to a research conducted by one of the most reputable psychologists in my country, people who want to change their lives by trying new things and taking risks are rarely subjected to depression, and thus are more successful, in comparison to individuals seeking their unchangeable lives. Accordingly, taking risks and trying new things help people to get rid of monotonous life, and motivate them to strive to catch their targets.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that even though there are some demerits concerning trying new issues and taking risks, the merits of it outweigh that its demerits on the ground that it gives one a chance not only to properly exploit opportunities, but also to learn precious points. Additionally, taking risks helps individuals to release from routine life which increases the level of happiness in society in the general and in benefit people's feeling in particular.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...umanity, human beings have been engaged so as to find ways in order to improve their liv...
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Line 2, column 547, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient manner" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ities in proper time and exploited them in an efficient manner. Unless these people wanted to try new ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot these great progresses in the world. Another interpretation as to why I do no...
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Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'theses'' or 'thesis's'?
Suggestion: theses'; thesis's
...ome full of ups and downs. I think that theses fluctuation gives meaning to it--or, to...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'i think', 'in particular', 'in summary', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220802919708 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.178832116788 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0912408759124 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0456204379562 0.046263068375 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0529197080292 0.0685040099705 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11496350365 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0583941605839 0.0351676179071 166% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91372836387 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0492700729927 0.0309702414327 159% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0839416058394 0.0887237588012 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00182481751825 0.0209618222197 9% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0164233576642 0.0139019557991 118% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2980.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 494.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03238866397 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372469635628 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253036437247 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182186234818 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12955465587 0.112833075102 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91372836387 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 67.9230682294 59.2087087015 115% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 32.9333333333 20.5533526081 160% => OK
Sentence length SD: 104.621646369 48.84282405 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 198.666666667 120.699889404 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9333333333 20.5533526081 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.644075263715 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 58.236977058 45.7405998639 127% => OK
Elegance: 1.42105263158 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188525754967 0.300154397459 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105119866871 0.103427244359 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.061527854097 0.0752933317313 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603424125003 0.497263757937 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165780709311 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959285477933 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818396564109 0.0781384742642 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.37491674614 0.336927656856 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0367026119015 0.067059652881 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130333411505 0.210909579961 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634000340225 0.0618886996521 102% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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