T:45-Young people decision for themselves rather than their parents.
young people try to be independent from their family. In this regret, I have to admit that I totally agree with this statement. There are couple of reasons in support of my idea. Firstly, modern young people have much more complex mind than before. Secondly, technology and internet make decision process much more easier for people. I will elaborate my reasons in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The fist exquisit point to be mentioned is that individuals have much more complex minds than before. People have to deal with modern technology. In this way, their mind shape in different aspects with a huge number of connections and complexity. Young people mind have ability to adopt itself with different situations and make a best choice. With young minds have logical orders, in addition without parents dependancy they make decisions. My personal anectode will well demonstrate this point of view. I was born in computer era and from my childhood I had to deal with smartphones. Every day I learned new things. To make a long story short, these devices prepare my mind for future decision making. Not to mention, the mind struggle games also very beneficial in learning me how to make decision on myself.
The second reason come to mind is that young people could easily find their questions in internet, or by sharing their situation on social networks obtain the best decision of their lives. The story of my younger brother could justify my idea. He had a problem on living dormitory or not. By explaning his problem on internet, everybody suggested a reason. Finally, he decide what to do and made a proper decision without dependancy in our parents.
Taken all aspects mentioned above into consideration, I pretty convinced that young people are able to make decision on their own, due to the fact that, they have compex mind which enable them to make decision quickly and efficiently. Furthermore, by vast number of information resources, young people could acquire more knowlende and share their own information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
young people try to be independent from their...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...and internet make decision process much more easier for people. I will elaborate my reasons...
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Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...self with different situations and make a best choice. With young minds have logi...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...erybody suggested a reason. Finally, he decide what to do and made a proper decision w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98847262248 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60546146322 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547550432277 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2202340244 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2608695652 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0869565217 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247230809782 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068016104962 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710667044924 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169435330756 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299110892115 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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