taking part-time job for children
An issue of concern turning into an obsession for many parents is the approach they can follow to help their children become prepared for the future. For this reason, a plethora of parents believe that one of the most practical methods is taking part-time job. Personally, I completely support this point of view. My reasons are manifold, among which the most substantial ones are such becoming independent and making decision alone, interacting with different people, and learning some significant skills.
To begin with, being independent from family is one of the predominant requirements of children, especially teenage children. According to a research, done by the sociology department of Tehran University, 18-year- old teenagers further incline to find a part-time job. Based on the survey, the majority of them tend to have a kind of job because not only they access an income, but also they are able to make decisions independently. Hence, they possess a higher level of self-confidence comparing with the other teens without work experience.
Beyond a shadow of a doubt, working is contributed to a higher level of interaction with other members of society. In other words, the more one interacts, the further he/she socializes. For instance, I was very poor/weak in communicating with other people some years ago, but when I could find a job in a company, I gradually learned how to make a suitable relationship with others.
Last but not least, through working, either in a small store or a famous company, an individual possesses the opportunity to gain their knowledge and improve their skills. Although at first blush, it seems that working in a small shop cannot be so beneficial, in second thoughts, it is crystal clear that it plays an indisputable role in ones’ financial intelligence. For example, the person learns how to make budget and live within the budget. In addition, some technical skills and information will be gained most likely handy for his or her future occupation.
To sum up, considering different aspects of this issue we may draw the conclusion that taking a part-time job is very advantageous for young adults, since they learn numerous skills in addition to a lot of information. Consequently, it is highly recommended that parents encourage their children to take a part-time job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...which the most substantial ones are such becoming independent and making decision...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18205804749 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98551348574 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604221635884 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5174708355 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.529411765 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348745121287 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107069031784 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139452535584 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204270129839 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15551047856 0.0645574589148 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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