taking risk
Some people think that doing the same thing day after day is better. People believe that doing the ordinary work is the best way for success. Although, I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that trying new thing or taking risk is the best method to be a successful person. The basis of may opinion is educational and social.
From a social perspective trying new thing is the better way to broaden my horizon . By working in different jobs . For example, for me as I am working in a pharmacy. Working on different work station help me to learn more. I was only working on filling prescriptions. Then I realized that I am very slow at typing computer. So I talked to my manager and asked him that I need to start typing. At that point I get my more experience at typing and filling. Trying new things is the best way to learn more.
Financially, taking risk will help you to understand the value of money. Some people think that taking risk will promote them to waste money. I agree with them, some time trying new things lead us to waste some money, but eventually we learn and we will never do it again. For instance, last month I was surfing the internet to buy some clothes. I found a very cheap website. I bought some clothes from that website. Unfortunately I put my credit number and they stole me. From that moment I learned that taking risk is the best way to learn new thing.
Personally, taking risk and learning new things helped me to improve my cooking skills. I as horrible on cooking. I bought books to help to teach me the best recipes. It tried to do some food for my kids. I took the risk to spend some time and money to learn new thing. I need to be a good cooker. My kids need to eat healthy food. It ended up that I become the best cooker in my family.
In conclusion for the reason I mentioned above, I believe that the best way to improve some thing. Or to success in you life is to spend time. Taking risk is work it. Some time it seems that taking risks is dangerous, however the opposite is true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33082706767 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38864995274 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4751394461 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 54.0 100.406767564 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.46875 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28125 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246907889372 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815880578558 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152914245714 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181599715149 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118920313859 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 11.7677419355 44% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 58.1214874552 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.95 10.9000537634 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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