For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, explain, and support your opinion on an issue. Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. The quality of your writing includes the development of your ideas, the organization of your essay, and the quality and accuracy of the language you use to express your ideas. You have 30 minutes to plan and complete your essay.
Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
We live in an era of technology and no one is untouched from it. In light of this, I firmly believe that parents should not forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with access to the internet), as it has become a necessity in the present times.
To begin with, technology not just helps in keeping in touch but also aids in learning today. In a number of countries, especially the developed ones, several assignments handed out to children require much more than textbooks, to be completed in a satisfactory manner. This became more evident as the process of online teaching and learning picked up in the times of the Coronavirus-19 pandemic. For instance, in India, with teachers as well as students locked up within homes for months, most of the schools turned to e-learning to keep up with the academic calender. For this, it was necessary for the students, even of primary classes, to access technology. As many parents could not spare a laptop or tab for their kids, the young ones participated in the online classes using smart phones. Thus, phones with internet access became a necessity during these times.
Additionally, a number of children also use smart phones for co-curricular activities. Let us understand this better with the help of a personal example. As a child, I used to learn Hindustani classical music on the Harmonium (keyboard) from a teacher who visited my home every Sunday. The only extra access to the activity that I had were some books and I had to completely rely on my teacher's style of imparting the skill to learn it. However, it was not very conducive for me and even after six years of training, I was not confident about it. Had I had access to the plethora of YouTube videos on Harmonium training (and hacks related to it) at that time, I feel I would have done a much better job as a kid. As such, smart phones can come in really handy for children.
One may argue that access to internet at a tender age may not be appropriate, and it does have some drawback. However, instead of keeping smart phones away from children - something which is nearly impossible in today's times - parents should actively monitor the kind of content that children are accessing on the internet.
To sum up, I will support parents who let their children have smart phones, if they require or desire one, and would suggest them to continually keep a tab on their tech-based activities to keep any untoward developments in check.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'phones'' or 'phone's'?
Suggestion: phones'; phone's
...forbid young children from owning smart phones cell phones with access to the internet...
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Line 2, column 245, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a satisfactory manner" with adverb for "satisfactory"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ch more than textbooks, to be completed in a satisfactory manner. This became more evident as the proces...
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Line 2, column 561, Rule ID: CALENDER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'calendar', a system of organizing days? A 'calender' is a machine.
Suggestion: calendar
...e-learning to keep up with the academic calender. For this, it was necessary for the stu...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...extra access to the activity that I had were some books and I had to completely rely...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, thus, well, for instance, i feel, kind of, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73255813953 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6557120915 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541860465116 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8103311413 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.105263158 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0583349539893 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198490608974 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0216744698996 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.035024099683 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200708971103 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.