Television advertising directed toward young children should not allowed.
Childhood is the crucial stage of life. It is the point where children learn and implement what they see in their surroundings. Television may cause a positive or negative impact on children. It may encourage children positively. However, it may push them into the fantasy world which causes major detrimental effects on the childhood. Some people believe that television advertising should not allow to young children, others would disagree. I, certainly believe that It should not allow because it will deceive children from reality and will cause some serious health issues.
First, television advertising deceives children. Usually, in advertising, companies make fantasy stories or advertise to sell their products and they know the tricks that how to attract the children. When children will see that, they will request that product from their parents. Also, it diverts children from the reality of the world. Some parents can’t afford that and some said they have plenty of stuff to play so use that first. For instance, when my daughter was five-year-old, she used to watch Television a lot and whenever, she saw something new on it, she requested me to buy that. Also, whenever she noticed any advertising closely, she tried to implement it. When I realized that this all happened because of Television advertising, I tried my level best to avoid her watching Television. I kept busy her in other activities like gardening and many others. Eventually, I created a difference between the good and bad habits in my daughter.
Second, Television advertising encourages them to watch the television all the time which may lead to some health issues like eyes problem. It will cause bad consequences in the future. So, parents should not give them permission to watch it. For instance, I read an article in the newspaper that the television kept busy children and the percentage of children, who are affected by it, is increasing day by day. Furthermore, the reason behind the children watching more television is attracting advertising and cartoons.
To sum it up, childhood is the point where children absorb much better and faster. So, it is the responsibility of parents that they don’t allow them to watch television advertising. Although, it builds up confidence and conserves them busy. But the pros of the television advertising should not allow is outweighed then the cons of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'eyes'' or 'eye's'?
Suggestion: eyes'; eye's
...ich may lead to some health issues like eyes problem. It will cause bad consequences...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17435897436 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85763450264 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520512820513 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9508709492 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6153846154 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03846153846 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286371809665 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886597024172 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928309394863 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19483804213 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455825101778 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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