Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed
Although it is generally agreed that young children need to be adapted to adult life gradually, the question remains whether some form of external influence on them should be limited or restricted. Personally, I am prone to believe that such phenomena as advertising targeting in particular kids should not be allowed. I hold this opinion for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children between the ages of two and five are mentally vulnerable to external impacts. Their psyche is fragile and, therefore, needs special care and protection. This, among other things, implies that kids should be isolated from various phenomena that can potentially harm their mental health. For example, when I was a child my parents never allowed me to watch TV with the exception of certain TV programs specifically designed for children. They were sure that watching TV would harm me mentally, and they were not mistaken. Advertising was making me anxious and nervous.
Additionally, commercial misguides kids. This is explained by the fact that advertising convinces that children need this very product irrespective of its actual qualities. My children's experience is a compelling example of this. Under the influence of advertising they are demanding soda, chips and chocolate in tremendous quantities. Whenever my wife and I refuse to buy the above mentioned items, we become bad parents for them.
Finally, advertising makes children consumers. They don't understand whether they really need this product or not. Moreover, kids do not realize that they can live a happy life without this or that product. For instance, my younger sister was not able to imagine her life without Barby dolls, which were been widely advertised when she was a child. All her actions and behavior were influenced by that dolls - a fact my parents were concerned about.
To sum up briefly, there is no doubt that advertising for children is not an acceptable thing. Its explanation is threefold: advertising may harm children's mental health, it provides incorrect information to them, and it prevents kids from analyzing the qualities of goods, thereby transforming them into consumers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, finally, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in particular, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26780626781 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83663172311 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609686609687 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.727527844 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0476190476 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47619047619 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210901220984 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608427956934 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061968040116 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123460389613 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579421903842 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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