Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

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Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

I think, one of the best way for manufacturers for selling their production, is advertising. Therefore it is better to allow them to do that, and there is no problem if their goal is children.
Firstly, advertising is an appropriate way, because it can familiarize children with new things. Nowadays people do not have enough time to bring their at the shop centers to see new production. Hince, if the governments eliminate it, how they will notice from their world? Yes, this program is really useful and essential for the children to see and learn beneficial things.
In addition, some advertising are really enjoyable. Factually, the majority of the directors know how to produce a suitable program for the children. Thus, they try to utalize cartoons' characters. These characters are really cute and make the program attractive for the children because children look at them like their favorite cartoon.
Finally, this idea that the advertisers try to deceive children to buy what they see on the program, is a false idea. In fact, there is no different between children and adult viewers because children look at them like an enjoyable program, and most of the time they do not recognize the meaning of that. The most important groups that are impressed by them are an adult one. For example, they see that a new smartphone is produced, and tomorrow they buy it. So, if we want to restrict advertising, at first we should limit it for adult people, not children.
In conclusion, advertising advantages overwhelm its disadvantages for these reasons. First, it can be informative for children. Second, it is like a cartoon, not more, and finally, they do not comprehend the goal of the advertising is selling their production since it does not have any danger for them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 94, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...lling their production, is advertising. Therefore it is better to allow them to do that, ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95986622074 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81424564026 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6592913133 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3888888889 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117111492862 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451071276434 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385256083129 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0731921425808 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251821821967 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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