Tpo 9. Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
I completely disagree with this claim that nowadays children are less creative than they were in the past. Here you can see my reasons.
First, now teachers' knowledge is not compariable with the past. Todays, most of the teacher must have an academic education or they must up to date their information to be an appropriate person for teaching to the students. So, most of them have good knowledge about different field of science and technology.This alternation has positive effects on childrens' knowledgae. The sufficient information that they gain from their teachers makes them to think about discovering or inventing new things. For example, we now see how children try to find out new idea about nanotechnology and robotic with their teachers assistance.
Second, the positive influence of new technology in children's spirit is another noticeable reason. The new technology such as computers, smartphones, and the internet completely changes the children's lives. Children have this chance to familiarize with a prosperous people who are successful in their education and job. This relationship with these new persons is a great motivation for children. In fact, they become aware from this fact that if they spend their time for studying and learning vital and useful information, they will be a successful person in the future and they will have comfortable life.
On the other hand, some people think that children were more creative in the past. Chiefly, in the past, parenrs pay attention more to the children in comparison with now. Now, parents do not have enough time because they must work hard. And we see its result in children's education and behavior. The absense of the parents in home makes the children lazy and they prefer to play game istead of studying. However, I still declare that now children are more creative. In fact, now children suffer a lot of stress and pressure because of their parents style of living. So, playing games is a good way for them to release their stress and become happy which brind a helth mind for them and helps them to think better and so become more creative.
According to my passage, there are a lot of reasons to prove my claim that nowadays’ children’s creativy is not comapriable with the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
First, now teachers knowledge is not compariable with the p...
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
...fferent field of science and technology.This alternation has positive effects on chi...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04249291785 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80270063498 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518413597734 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1214672556 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6842105263 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263184011898 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906344703233 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055367915045 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167728169435 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400206092469 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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