Television advertising directed towards young children ( aged two to five ) should not be allowed.
Nowadays, television advertising is developing with fast rate and television advertising directed towards young children between two and five years old has been the topic of some controversies. Some housewifes said that they should not be allowed. In other hand ,some people said they should be allowed under control. In my oppinion, I am better convinced with both of them for following reasons.
The first reason why I agree with let children watch television advertisement is children are interesting in watching cartoons. It can make us easier to feed our kids by let them wacth advertisement while eating. Take my aunt as an example, she often let her kids watch advertisement with merrily song which make her kids excite to eat. Moreover, when you are busy with housework and your kids always disturb you, you can let them watch television advertisement which have funny cartoon firgues or funny songs so they can not disturb you. In addition, two and five years old can improve listening skill when they watch television advertisements. Moreover, kids can learn songs and sing along.
Television advertisement may be good at some feild , but it also have the bad effect to children. Children eyes are very weak , if you let your kids watch television over control, your children will be nearsighted. In addition, children have not ability to distinguish what is good imformation or bad imformation. Children will be negatively affected by the bad advertisement. Take my cousin as an example , he have seen advertisement of carbonated soft drink and he immediately go to local store to buy it. Few hours later he have had stomachache because this drink have ingredient bad for human health. Hence , parent should consider which advertisement is good for children .
In conclusion , television program and advertisement have both advantages and disadvantages so it is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writting before allow children watch television programs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27044025157 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02460317332 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559748427673 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7918544608 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1111111111 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340735680729 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111266351502 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993158873882 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218474315906 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989872556065 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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