Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Comments about societies rules have been an appealing topic. Numerous people state that societies today expect youngsters to follow and obey such strict rules. Personally, I am convinced with this statement due to the following reasons.
On one hand, countries or societies improvement draw much of my attention. It is well noted that having a strict rules is sure to encourage people in some societies or countries to become more disciplinal and responsible. Hence, it raise people's awareness about contributing to the societies. Therefore, people are likely to concentrate more on working and contributing to the societies and, furthermore, to the countries. As a result, the societies are certain to develop. More interestingly, having strict rules is bound to improve the local tourism. Indeed, there are some strict rules about protecting environment such as chewing gums, cigarettes are banned in some places. Consequently, there is a likelihood that the environment is protected. Accordingly, the image of this location is able to be improved and people have a tendency to visit such comfortable places. Take my city, Kim Dong, as an example, 6 years ago, Kim Dong was a poor city and extremely polluted, nobody considered this place as a tourism location. Garbage was always throwed arbitrary in road or gathered into a huge heap and burnt. The city was covered with a lot of smog all day. The local government has made some policies and rules in order to improve the situations. People who throwed garbage were fined and they lost a significant amount of money. After one year the policies applied, the awareness of people about protecting environment was improved. And now, Kim Dong is one of the most beautiful location and its tourism is developing with a fast rate. With no doubt, having strict rules encourage societies to improve.
On the other hand, it is claimed that strict rules bring people uncomfortable moments. Therefore, the societies or the countries are capable to be chaotic and people are not able to enjoy their personal enjoyments. However, it is unnecessarily the case. In fact, rules are based on countries's policies and carefully planned so as they are suitable for every one. In addtion, it is possible for the societies or countries to decrease the criminal rate when they have strict rules. Thus, people are likely to feel safe, hence, they are able to concentrate on working, enjoying life and following hobbies. As a consequent, people are stand a golden chance to improve their life condition. By and large, the idea of having strict rules makes societies chaotic is absurd.
All in all, societies improvement and personal enjoyments are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writting before making the right decisions on commending about the rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: rule
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Message: Did you mean 'raises'?
Suggestion: raises
... disciplinal and responsible. Hence, it raise peoples awareness about contributing to...
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in fact, no doubt, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15268817204 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86315638237 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490322580645 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3273478742 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8666666667 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226923792139 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625665355259 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603059619976 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163472384699 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935030300509 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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