Do you agree or disagree with the statement: people buy things not because of need but because others also buy them.
Reasons to buy things has been an appealing topic. Numerous customers over the world argue that people buy things because other people buy them not because they need them. Personally, I am convinced with this argument due to the following reasons.
On one hand, personal enjoyments draw much of my attention. It can not be denied that buying things creates chances for people to follow their hobbies. Therefore, people are likely to be filled with happiness and relaxedness. As a result, people stand a golden chances to enjoy life better or work more efficiency. More interestingly, buying things is sure to enhance personal social status .When people want to absorb in elite society or do not want to become backward, they are likely to improve their appearance by buying new things that everyone has or represent higher social status. In generally, people have a tendency to buy and use things that are not suitable with their positions. I hereby take this circumstance to a more personal level. Take my friend, Kim Dong, as an example, he works as a normal employee in factory. Although he works as an employee, he always purchases high-end stuff or using such high-quality services. When he has dinner out, he always wears a beautiful suit, which make him look like a boss or a business man. Therefore, the restaurants alway treats him as a wealthy customer and serves him with its best services. Even better, he has made new relationships with rich people and opened his social circle to a higher standard. By and large, buying things brings people with relaxed moments
On the other hand, it is claimed that buying things because everyone buys them take people a lot of time. This badly effect people's daily schedule and financial status . As a consequent, their life quality are likely to decrease. However, it is unnecessarily the case. In fact, no matter what things people buy, they are probably to play huge roles in some circumstances, both in the present and future. Consequently, the time people spend on buying things is not wasted. In addition, people are spending a significant amount of money on purchasing things, especially frequent shopping. Hence, there is a likelihood that people augment their money management skill since they have to allocate their expense to match with their budget so as to accomplish their daily life and fulfill their wants. Thus, they are capable of applying it in their life or their career to make their life quality become better. With no doubt, the idea of buying things wastes time and make life quality worse is absurd.
All in all, personal enjoyment and life quality improvement are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writting to make a right decison on buying things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, as to, in addition, in fact, in general, no doubt, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95744680851 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61830874422 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523404255319 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8719667683 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2962962963 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4074074074 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335602179895 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960665209505 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129571389237 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237283376792 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141972813572 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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