Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Other think access to much information creates problems.
Which view do you agree with?
Effects of the Internet has been an appealing topic. Different people around the world possess different reasons for the different choices between Internet provides lots of good information and accessing to much information makes problems. Personally, I am interested in the latter for the following reasons.
On one hand, the availability of Internet draws much of my attention. It is widely known that accessing to much information creates chances for people to access to unreliable websites which have a lot of dangerous things. Indeed, accessing to unreliable websites expose people devices to be hacked by hackers. Therefore, hackers are certain to thieve valuable information from users as much as they can. As a result, there is likelihood that user's personal life be distracted and badly changed. More seriously, it is possible for people to increase the crime rate when they access to much information. Take my friend, Kim dong, as an example. He bought his mobile phone three month ago through one strange website. When he received his phone, he realized that he has been fooled. He was very shock because he paid a significant amount of money to receive a broken phone. By and large, accessing to much information on Internet is bound to badly affect users .
On the other hand, it is claimed that all information on Internet are carefully screened by the government. Therefore, information on Internet are not likely to create problem for users. However, that is unnecessarily the case. Infact, there are millions of websites from every over the world. Hence, the person who manage one website is the website owner. In addition, nowadays, it is possible for everyone over the world to have their own websites. Consequently, the websites owners are certain to post anything they want on their websites and share them to everyone. Accordingly, some people with bad purpose are stand a golden chances to post false information on Internet in order to complete their purpose. As a result, it is possible for the users who access to those websites to make wrong decisions which cause a lot of problems. With no doubt, the idea that information on Internet can not create problems because government manage all websites is absurd.
All in all, the availability of Internet and the careless and untight websites management are the convincing reasons for my choices. It is highly recomended that people should carefully consider my writting to make a right decision on the effects of Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... lots of good information and accessing to much information makes problems. Person...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...tion. It is widely known that accessing to much information creates chances for pe...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...ample. He bought his mobile phone three month ago through one strange website. When h...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...a broken phone. By and large, accessing to much information on Internet is bound t...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... Internet is bound to badly affect users . On the other hand, it is claimed that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, in addition, no doubt, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09756097561 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78724666456 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49756097561 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0279896536 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3846153846 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7692307692 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290128680513 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733866640622 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785772293476 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165919359565 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526818910654 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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